12×12 Update and a Summer Send-Off Contest created by Susanna Leonard Hill!

3 Sep

First, I will start off with the story for the Summer Send-Off Contest entry. Below is my entry and I think I may use the idea to write a book or a longer story.

The rules for the contest as stated on Ms. Hill’s blog are:

The contest is for a children’s story of 250 words or less based on the picture below and in which somebody somewhere in your story says, in dialogue, “Did/do you see that?” (you may substitute any of the other senses – “Did/do you hear/feel/taste/smell that?”) and somebody somewhere in your story says, “Goodbye!” (you are allowed to substitute “Farewell!”, “Au revoir!”, “Sayonara!”, “Ciao!”, or “So long!”). Click HERE to go to Ms. Hill’s blog and see all the entries!

Heather Newman made the awesome illustration for the contest. I really like all the action going on in it! To go to Ms. Newman’s website click HERE.

illustration copyright Heather Newman 2012 used by permission

Dragon!

By Erik

Once Upon A Time, in a land far away (depending on where you are), a princess named Violet was high in a tower. She wasn’t trapped there, mind you. You see, Violet wasn’t an ordinary princess.

One day, Violet heard a commotion outside her window.

“He lit the moat on fire again!” Shouted the stable-boy to Josi, the princesses’ faithful servant.   “I already asked The Pale Sorceress to cast an extinguishing spell!”

Josi yelled up to Violet’s window. “Did you hear that? Your parents will banish us all! What kind of princess has a pet dragon anyway?”

“But Cuddles is just a baby!” was the reply.

“A BABY? He’s about 15… Oh-no, here comes Timothy!” Josi groaned. Violet rolled her eyes at the approaching figure.

As Timothy got closer he boasted, “I shall smite thee, foul beast and save yonder fair maiden, Violet! Oh dear Violet, I hath come hither to rescue thee!”

Violet felt her face get red with anger as she screamed back. “First of all, don’t talk funny. Smite and hither, who talks like that? It’s weird. Second, Cuddles is my PET! I DON’T NEED RESCUING!”

Just then, Sorceress cast the spell to blow out the fire. As the gust came, it lifted Timothy and blew him back to his kingdom!

“Farewell!” Timothy called as he faded in the distance.

“Will he be alright? Josi asked.

“Don’t worry, he’ll be back. He always comes back.” Violet sighed.

And they all lived happily ever after…well, until next time.

Now, for my 12×12 update!

For those of you who don’t know, I am trying to do Julie Hedlund’s 12×12 Challenge. It is a challenge to write 12 picture book drafts in 12 months in 2012. You can click on the 12×12 banner on the right side bar or the one above to learn more about it. I have been working on a PB about a bird and a worm who are friends and I have been trying to make it rhyme well. I wrote the story last month and have been working on the rhyming, but I didn’t get as much done as I wanted to. In September I am going to try to complete the draft! Wish me luck 😀

58 Responses to “12×12 Update and a Summer Send-Off Contest created by Susanna Leonard Hill!”

  1. Susanna Leonard Hill September 3, 2012 at 7:04 am #

    Erik, I love your story! The qualifier about depending on where you are made me laugh out loud! 🙂 I like your reversal of roles – that Violet doesn’t need rescuing and Timothy is a pain in her neck 🙂 And who could resist a pet dragon named Cuddles? Thanks for a great entry! And good luck with your rhyming – I’m sure you can do it!

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    • thiskidreviewsbooks September 3, 2012 at 7:26 am #

      Thanks Ms. Hill! That made my parents LOL too 😀 I’m glad you liked my story! I just realized I forgot to link directly back to your blog, so I fixed it now. I hope people visit and read all the great entries!

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  2. Angela Brown September 3, 2012 at 7:19 am #

    Your story made my day. I think I’ll be smiling for quite some time thinking of that pesky “rescuing” hero and the princess who’s actually quite fine 🙂

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  3. Joanna Marple September 3, 2012 at 7:35 am #

    This cracked me up! I love how you have twisted all stereotypes on their heads! Brilliant!

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  4. Diane M. Robinson September 3, 2012 at 7:57 am #

    This is a great and fun story! I like the princess who doesn’t need rescuing. Well done.

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  5. Jarm Del Boccio September 3, 2012 at 8:00 am #

    I love the surprise elements in your stories, Erik. So, Cuddles (what a funny name for a dragon) is a pet?? Clever!
    Keep up the good work on the PBs…

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  6. Renee LaTulippe (@ReneeMLaTulippe) September 3, 2012 at 8:53 am #

    Erik, Erik, Erik…you are going to be (already are) an author, no doubt. I love your humor and witty asides, like “depending on where you live,” and that whole part about “Who talks like that? It’s weird” is FABULOUS! This was so much fun, from top to bottom.

    Of all the things I’ve read of yours, this is my favorite so far. Bravo!!!!!

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    • thiskidreviewsbooks September 3, 2012 at 7:46 pm #

      Thanks Ms. LaTulippe! 🙂 That means a lot coming from you – I really like your writing!

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  7. Kirsten Larson September 3, 2012 at 9:32 am #

    Erik, I know the feeling when a draft is taking longer to finish. I have one that is still sitting on the back burner…Good luck finishing the bird and the worm. In the meantime, I love your dragon story. Cuddles is the best name for a dragon ever.

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    • thiskidreviewsbooks September 3, 2012 at 7:49 pm #

      Thank you for the good luck wish! I am glad you like my story. I hope your draft gets to the front burner!

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  8. Stephanie Brockway September 3, 2012 at 9:35 am #

    Love your story, Erik! Good work! 🙂

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  9. julie rowan zoch September 3, 2012 at 10:02 am #

    Dragon! is red-hot! Best of luck with the bird and worm story!

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  10. Beth Stilborn September 3, 2012 at 10:14 am #

    Erik, this story is fantastic! I love how you’ve turned everything on its head. Good going!

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  11. KidLitReviews September 3, 2012 at 10:35 am #

    I really like your story. The humor is terrific. Don’t worry about the rhyming Eric. It will happen and if it doesn’t you do a great job writing your stories. I am positive that one day you will be a best selling author,

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  12. Penny Klostermann September 3, 2012 at 11:03 am #

    Erik!!! Stupendous job! Your story is hilarious. There are so many funny lines! My favorite: “First of all, don’t talk funny. Smite and hither, who talks like that? It’s weird.” You told a great story in just a few words and it goes perfectly with Heather’s illustration! Like I said….Stupendous!!!

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    • thiskidreviewsbooks September 3, 2012 at 7:59 pm #

      Thank you Ms. Klostermann! I am glad you liked my story! I really liked yours too (I always love your poems!)! 🙂

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  13. Laura September 3, 2012 at 2:38 pm #

    The fairy tale genre is so fun to turn on its head. You did a terrific job upending typical roles and archetypes. Great story!

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    • thiskidreviewsbooks September 3, 2012 at 8:01 pm #

      Thank you Ms. Renauld! It is fun to make up a story with unusual characters! 🙂

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  14. Patricia Tilton September 3, 2012 at 3:09 pm #

    What a great role reversal for this story. I laughed as I read it. Excellent writing and great wit!

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  15. Catherine Johnson September 3, 2012 at 3:13 pm #

    Thou hast produced words of magic and hithertofore I crown you master of Storyville, Sir Erik. Awesome!

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    • thiskidreviewsbooks September 3, 2012 at 8:07 pm #

      Thank ye, thee fair Mistress of Writeopolis! I, Sir Erik, humbly accept the title which ye bestowed upon me! 😉

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      • Catherine Johnson September 4, 2012 at 5:45 pm #

        🙂

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  16. Lynn A. Davidson September 3, 2012 at 5:04 pm #

    Erik, this is a delightfully funny story. I love your imagination. 🙂

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  17. viviankirkfield September 3, 2012 at 5:20 pm #

    Erik…what a stellar story! I love so much about it…Cuddles – what a perfect name for a pet dragon…Violet – who doesn’t need rescuing and is a strong matter-of-fact princess…the prince – who thinks he has to talk like a knight of old. I could see the story unfolding in my mind’s eye. 🙂
    Good luck with the September draft
    Writing’s like floating on a raft
    With rhyming one will nver know
    If words should stay or words should go.
    Just keep writing! You are great!

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    • viviankirkfield September 3, 2012 at 5:21 pm #

      Oops…”never”

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    • thiskidreviewsbooks September 3, 2012 at 8:13 pm #

      Thank you Ms. Kirkfield!
      Who shall never yield,
      Whether giving advice,
      Or just being nice,
      She’s a good friend,
      Who will help to the end!
      🙂

      I am glad you like my story! 🙂

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      • viviankirkfield September 3, 2012 at 11:21 pm #

        Bravo, Erik! I’m honored that you took time to compose a rhyme of thanks! This is VERY wonderful. 🙂

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      • thiskidreviewsbooks September 4, 2012 at 6:55 pm #

        😀

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  18. Kim Murray September 3, 2012 at 6:58 pm #

    I really like the dialogue and characters in your story. Well done!

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  19. Cathy Mealey September 3, 2012 at 8:47 pm #

    Of COURSE he would boasted: “I shall smite thee, foul beast and save yonder fair maiden, Violet! Oh dear Violet, I hath come hither to rescue thee!”
    Good for Violet, to roll her eyes and straighten him out! Eric, your work is stellar! Best of luck in the contest!

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  20. jama September 3, 2012 at 10:03 pm #

    Hah! Love this. Cuddles is the best name! And I like the feminist princess :). Great job!!

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  21. Darlene September 3, 2012 at 11:02 pm #

    Your story is terrific!! I hope you win. I loved it so much I read it twice. It would make a great picture book too. Good luck.

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  22. hannahholt September 4, 2012 at 3:23 pm #

    “… well, until next time.” 🙂 Love it!

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  23. Beth Stilborn September 4, 2012 at 5:20 pm #

    I’m back — my friend Jan read this, and asked me to let you know that she absolutely loved it. You ROCK!

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    • thiskidreviewsbooks September 4, 2012 at 7:02 pm #

      Woot Woot Woot – I ROCK 🙂 Thanks and tell your friend thank you from me 😀

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  24. kathyellen September 7, 2012 at 12:14 pm #

    Erik, loved the “depending on where you are” too.
    Also the, “Who talks like that?” made me laugh…I have friends who say that all the time.
    Nice story and good job!!

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  25. Myra GB September 9, 2012 at 3:08 am #

    Now, that was one fine interpretation of the lovely illustration. Your reading stands you in good stead when you venture into writing. Great work, Erik! I love how the fun elements are interwoven into what could easily become a tragic story. 🙂

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    • thiskidreviewsbooks September 9, 2012 at 1:27 pm #

      I am very happy you like my story! Ms. Newman’s illutration was very fun to write about!

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  26. lindzz21 September 11, 2012 at 8:24 am #

    Great dragon story Erik – it cracked me up! I hope you do decide to make it into a book – more please! 🙂

    Linda

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    • thiskidreviewsbooks September 12, 2012 at 7:27 pm #

      Thank you! I am glad my story made you laugh 🙂 I think I am going to make it into a book or longer story!

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