My Entry in the Susanna Leonard Hill Holiday Writing Contest!

This was supposed to be my Friday post, but our internet keeps going out (we have a  lot of ice here) so I am going to post it now just in case our internet goes out for a while. I don’t want to miss tomorrow’s deadline for posting my entry (plus tomorrow is Friday the 13th and you never know…).

YAY! It’s

The 3rd Annual Holiday Contest!!!

crashing sleigh

The contest is hosted by Susanna Leonard Hill! Check out all of the totally awesome entries by clicking HERE!

Now for the rules (taken from Ms. Hill’s blog) – 

“Write a children’s story about a Holiday Mishap, mix-up, miscommunication, mistake, or potential disaster (a la Grandma Got Run Over By A Reindeer :)).  Your story may be poetry or prose, silly or serious or sweet, religious or not, based on Christmas, Hanukkah, Kwanzaa or whatever you celebrate, but is not to exceed 350 words not counting the title”

I liked the idea of writing about a holiday mishap and really racked my brain on what to write because I wanted it to be different. Here is what I came up with (I am at 350 words!). I hope you like it! 😀

CODE NAME: KRINGLE

Although the Christmas Eve air was frozen, a bead of sweat ran down the side of the pilot’s face. He delivered the package and slipped away, or so he thought.

“I’m getting too old for this,” he muttered. The pilot glanced behind him. He could see the outline of the jet formation closing in on his craft. “They keep trying to catch me in the act. They’ll have to try harder than that!”

“Sir, the aircraft have a lock on our position. You can’t make the next drop,” said the officer in front of the computer.

“Unacceptable!” boomed the pilot. “We’ll make every scheduled drop. We lost the Shenyang J-11s over China and we’ll out-run these jets too.”

 The craft’s controls felt heavy in the pilot’s hands. Every year their tracking technology advanced greatly, but he had a dedicated team working day and night to make sure he stayed ahead. His missions depend on secrecy.

“Dash, tell Rudy to break formation. He can use his infrared beacon to distract those F-16s!”

“Roger that!” Dash barked.

“Sir, NORAD confirmed they are tracking us. We’re no longer a covert operation,” the officer worried.

“Contact our mole,” the pilot ordered. “She’ll feed NORAD false information. They’ll be chasing a flock of geese soon.”

The officer stuttered, “B-But, didn’t she –“

“Get run over by a reindeer?” The pilot interrupted. “Ha! That was just a cover. She faked her death to become our NORAD inside-agent.”

“I’m on it Sir,” said the officer as he typed an encrypted message.

The pilot watched a red light fly off to the South-West of his position. He smiled to himself when the F-16s followed. “Way to go Rudy! We’re going for our next drop. Get ready boys!”

“Sir, we just received a communication from Agent Grandma. She was successful. NORAD now has our current position somewhere over Indonesia,” the officer said with a grin that ran from pointy ear to pointy ear.

“Try to track me, will ya?!” Santa’s belly shook with laughter as he hollered with a twinkle in his eye. “HO HO HO! Maybe next year!”

English: Canada NORAD Jet Fighter Santa Escort

(Photo credit: Wikipedia)

English: NORAD Santa Claus Fighter Escort

(Photo credit: Wikipedia)



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111 replies

  1. Erik, this is terrific! It’s so clever and funny. I love it! Great job!

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  2. Erik, I love it! Very clever and original! Fantastic job! 🙂

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  3. An original take on an old tale, Erik! Nicely done.

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  4. I love this story! Santa is a smart pilot!

    Love and licks,
    Cupcake

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  5. 🙂 This is so much fun! Great job – the cover story is great.
    Best of luck with your entry, Erik.
    ~CM & the Gang

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  6. Love this! You are so creative! This story made me chuckle and I loved your description. Well done!

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  7. Originality – check! Great writing – check! Totally funny – check!
    This is a winner, Erik! GREAT JOB!

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  8. Erik, this story is EXCELLENT. I loved it. LOL at the part about agent Grandma faking her own death. Very clever and well done. Great job!

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  9. Yay — I’ve been waiting what for your Christmas story. This is outstanding!. It is funny, paced and well written. So clever to include “Granda” as a secret agent. You have a future as an author — even if it is on the side!

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  10. Love your unique and very hilarious story, Erik! That reference to Grandma being run over by reindeer was the best!! 😀

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  11. Wonderful. Love Love the secret agent part!

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  12. This is absolutely brilliant! Oh my, I enjoyed this story! Yay, Erik!

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  13. That is one awesome story and a unique take on how Santa delivers those toys! Loved the whole ‘ops’ speak.

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  14. Hands-down THE winner. Jet planes? NORAD? Erik, you are amazing. Have a wonderful holiday season.

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  15. brilliant, erik! i want this pilot flying my next delta trip.

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  16. FUN-TASTIC! Great job, Eric! Happy Holidays! :0)

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  17. Your imagination is so cool, Erik. Way too go! 🙂

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  18. Wow Erik! What a fantastic story. I LOVE this line, ““Dash, tell Rudy to break formation. He can use his infrared beacon to distract those F-16s!”” and your opening line is great, really conveys the tension. I see great things in your future!!! 😀 Wow.

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  19. Erik, this is total GENIUS! So funny and gave me a warm deep down feeling when I read it. Love that ending. PERFECTO! Merry Christmas!!!!!!!!!

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  20. Love the Secret Agent Santa, Erik! Clever and super fun!

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  21. My belly’s shaking with laughter, too! Grandma Agent has to be the best character EVER!!!!
    I love this, Erik! It just plain ol’ awesome!

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  22. Erik, I second what Penny just said. The story is awesome! Good luck with the competition. Happy, happy holidays!

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  23. Oh my goodness! Fantastic, Erik! So clever and original! I love the idea of Santa being a secret agent and trying to outwit NORAD and all the other busybodies trying to track him! And Grandma faking her own death to become his mole? Inspired!!! And the glee he gets in gaining the upper hand once again? Delightful! 🙂 Thanks so much for a superb entry and for joining in the holiday contest fun!

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  24. Erik, has anyone ever told you your writing is improving? This story hit the “Brilliant” bell on my writing scale. Publishers are going to be fighting over you! Wonderful story with lots of clever twists. If Susanna does not choose this story as the winner, well, there’is a ringer. I’ll call foul. 😀

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  25. Great post Erik! What a darling, amusing story. I love the line about the “mole” getting run over by a reindeer. I also love the fact that you used F-16’s (and I love the photos). I worked around F-15’s when I was in the Air Force, but saw plenty of F-16’s too. I have no doubt if anyone could avoid these awesome aircrafts it is Mr. Kringle himself. Thanks for putting a smile on my face before Christmas cookie day!

    Paul R. Hewlett

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  26. I always look forward to your tremendously creative entries. This is another winner! Loved it!

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  27. I love this, Erik! “Agent Grandma”…LOL!!! This one’s a winner – great job! 🙂

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  28. That was brilliant, and very original, Erik.

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  29. What an amazing artist you are! This story is just amazing, Erik! This is such an original story and so well written. Oh and I love the graphics. Totally Major! You’re giving everyone a run for their money. Can’t wait to see the outcome of this contest. Again, well done.

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  30. Wow! Great job! You’ve got quite a future ahead of you… Santa’s not the only one ahead of the curve. 😉

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  31. Very original! I like it!

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  32. Glad Santa was able to “fly under the radar.” 😉

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  33. Oh my goodness that is hilarious! Awesome job Erik!

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  34. What a great idea! I love all the connections you wove in and the excellent sprinkling of humor!

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  35. So well-written, Erik! Just excellent!

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  36. Great tension! So creative, Erik! Merry Christmas!

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  37. I REALLY love this story! I’m SO impressed a St. Bernard wrote this! I mean, getting past having to type with giant paws is enough of a feat, but THIS! Wow! 😉

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  38. brilliant! good covert ops there. well done and well written.

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  39. what fun to read. I love Santa doing covert ops…. and the whole reference to NORAD (who started “tracking Santa” years ago).

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  40. Great story Erik, it kept me laughing and reading right to the end. Your Christmas references were so cleverly woven into the story too. Happy Holidays to you and your family 🙂

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  41. Awesome! Count me in as a fan of your reference to “Grandma Got Run Over by a Reindeer” reference 😉

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  42. I love this one. You should make it into a picture book one day!

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  43. What a fun and clever twist, Erik. I smiled the whole way through. Well done!

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  44. Joyful tale and fine example of creative writing! I credited and re-posted on my blog.

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  45. Yes, this is most original entry and deserves an honorable mention. Great going, Erik. Congrats!. 🙂

    Merry Christmas!

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  46. I meant to leave a comment earlier and say I loved your entry! You are super talented and have a great career ahead of you! Well done you.

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  47. This is perfect, Erik! I love it! I can see it being turned into a fabulous picture book! Also reminded me a little bit of Hoodwinked with the reference to Agent Grandma. Have you watched that film yet? One of our absolute favourites.

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  48. This was well done, Erik. You have such a wonderful imagination. 🙂

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