My Entry in the Susanna Leonard Hill 4th Annual Halloweensie Writing Contest!

27 Oct

It’s the 4th Annual HALLOWEENSIE CONTEST!!!!!

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Get ready for some great Halloween stories! You can check out all the entries in the contest at Susanna Leonard Hill’s blog HERE and mine right below!

The rules for the contest are (copied from Ms. Hill’s blog) –

“Write a 100 word Halloween story appropriate for children (title not included in the 100 words), using the words pumpkinbroomstick, and creak.   Your story can be poetry or prose, scary, funny or anything in between, but it will only count for the contest if it includes those 3 words and is 100 words (you can go under, but not over!). Post your story on your blog between right now this very second and Friday October 31st by 11:59 PM EDT”

Now – onto my entry! I hope you like it!

A Halloween Errand (100 words)

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© ray8 –


The run-down store was deserted, except for the bored check-out clerk.

I searched the shelves for the trick-or-treat candy Mom wanted.

“Pumpkins and broomsticks,” a voice whispered.

Creeeak, groaned the floorboards.

Goosebumps crawled up my back.

Wasn’t the store deserted?

“Pumpkins and broomsticks.”



I turned.

No one.

“Pumpkins and broomsticks.”


My heart pounded.

Forget the candy! I’m out of here!

A hand grabbed my arm.

I spun in terror.



“I can’t find the pumpkins and broomsticks,” said an elderly lady holding a shopping list. “I’m going to a party tonight. Can you help me look?”



80 Responses to “My Entry in the Susanna Leonard Hill 4th Annual Halloweensie Writing Contest!”

  1. cherylsec October 27, 2014 at 4:36 pm #

    Excellent, Erik! What a fun story! I really enjoyed it. Great job! 🙂


  2. The Story Reading Ape October 27, 2014 at 5:01 pm #

    Good job ERIK 😀


  3. maliaann October 27, 2014 at 5:02 pm #

    Spooktacular, Erik! Fingers, fangs and toes crossed that you win! 🙂


  4. clarbojahn October 27, 2014 at 5:06 pm #

    Oh Wow! Erik! Really made me smile out loud. great job!

    Don’t let the Great Pumpkin get you!
    Happy Halloween! 🙂


  5. Lauri Meyers October 27, 2014 at 5:24 pm #

    OOH! Good one Erik. Nothing is scarier than an old lady. Wait. That didn’t come out right. Anyway you scared me up good!


  6. Robyn Campbell October 27, 2014 at 5:29 pm #

    Erik, Clicked on the LOVE button. Why it’s…it’s…(you know), Magsmashive!!! *wink* Outstanding job. So creative. And spine-chilling. What an ending!!


  7. Robyn Campbell October 27, 2014 at 5:30 pm #

    Have a donut. 🙂


  8. Gayle H. Swift (@GayleHSwift) October 27, 2014 at 5:52 pm #

    Clever and creepy!


  9. LucyJartz October 27, 2014 at 6:55 pm #

    I was held in suspense. Great super-short story.


  10. Catherine Johnson October 27, 2014 at 6:57 pm #

    Erik that is amazeballs! You should try your hand at thrillers when you’re a bit older. You’re really great at suspense.


  11. yvettecarol October 27, 2014 at 7:09 pm #

    Awesome job, Erik. I see a fine writing future ahead!


  12. Angela Brown October 27, 2014 at 7:33 pm #

    That was suspenseful and such a fun read!


  13. Penny Parker Klostermann October 27, 2014 at 7:45 pm #

    PHEW is right! I’m so glad it was the old lady and not the ghost who lives in the storeroom of ALL 24-hour Stores!!!!! You knew that didn’t you? They hang out there because they can haunt 24 hours a day! Yes, it’s true.
    Really fun entry, Erik! Loved the suspense!


    • thiskidreviewsbooks November 3, 2014 at 7:30 am #

      Thank you Ms. Klostermann! W-wait. There are g-g-g-ghosts in 24-hour stores?! AHHHHH!!!! 😉


  14. Genevieve Petrillo October 27, 2014 at 8:26 pm #

    GAH, E! You know I scare easy! That story made my paws twitch with fears! Good luck.

    Love and licks,


  15. David Eveleigh October 27, 2014 at 8:38 pm #

    Great job, Erik 🙂


  16. Lynn A. Davidson October 27, 2014 at 10:07 pm #

    I love surprise endings like this, ones with the chuckle factor. Great story, Erik! 🙂


  17. Darlene October 27, 2014 at 10:14 pm #

    I LOVE it! Perfect suspense and great ending. Have a great Halloween.


  18. Patricia Tilton October 27, 2014 at 11:06 pm #

    I actually jumped at the end. Great entry.


  19. grammypags1 October 27, 2014 at 11:06 pm #

    Your story is GREAT, Erik the GREAT! What fun and very clever! ♡


  20. Elle Carter Neal October 28, 2014 at 6:53 am #

    Ha, ha! Really nice twist to the story 🙂


  21. Michelle Isenhoff October 28, 2014 at 8:25 am #



  22. Carrie Finison October 28, 2014 at 9:57 am #

    You built great suspense in this story, Erik! I loved the ending.


  23. julie rowan zoch October 28, 2014 at 11:09 am #

    Haha! Watch out for whispering old women in want of well-read asssssitance! Wonderful entry, Erik!


  24. Romelle Broas October 28, 2014 at 4:36 pm #

    Ha-ha! That was a fun surprising ending. Great job, Erik!


  25. Susanna Leonard Hill October 28, 2014 at 10:25 pm #

    Ooh, how fun, Erik! That was delightfully creepy! Loved the surprise ending 🙂 (And I have fixed your link on the link list, so hopefully you’ll get some more visitors now for your wonderful story! :)) Thanks so much for joining in the fun as always! 🙂


    • thiskidreviewsbooks November 4, 2014 at 6:51 am #

      Thank you for fixing the link! I really appreciate it! Your contest was great! 😀


  26. marlainagray October 28, 2014 at 11:23 pm #

    This is nicely spooky!


  27. Susan Halko October 29, 2014 at 12:18 pm #

    Great story, Eric–super suspenseful! As a parent, I am glad to know about your blog, now, too! Thanks!


  28. Joanna October 29, 2014 at 1:50 pm #

    Ha, you totally caught me on the surprise ending!


  29. Buffy Silverman October 29, 2014 at 2:46 pm #

    Great ending, Erik!


  30. Darshana October 29, 2014 at 3:42 pm #

    Great way to build up the tension. Totally didn’t see that ending coming!


  31. LovableLobo October 29, 2014 at 5:26 pm #

    Super spooky, super creative, super cool, SuperKid!


  32. Cathy Ballou Mealey October 30, 2014 at 4:23 pm #

    I was hanging on every word….Yikes! Glad to know old ladies get to go to parties too. I’ve brought casseroles but never pumpkins and broomsticks! 😉


  33. Christie Allred October 30, 2014 at 5:29 pm #

    Haha! Way to go. Good luck in the contest. 🙂


  34. writersideup October 30, 2014 at 8:48 pm #

    Very clever twist, Erik! 🙂 Good luck!


  35. jeanjames October 30, 2014 at 9:12 pm #

    I think I’m going to go around saying “pumpkins and broomsticks” in my head tonight. Great story!!


  36. Carrie Charley Brown October 30, 2014 at 11:45 pm #

    Spooky AND fun! 🙂 Good job, Erik!


  37. stanleyandkatrina October 31, 2014 at 1:08 am #



  38. Sylvia Liu October 31, 2014 at 7:29 am #

    Ha – that’s great fun, Erik. Good job!


  39. Diane Tulloch October 31, 2014 at 9:55 pm #

    Whoaoooo! that was scary! I’m not going shopping in little-ole stores anymore…. lol! Great writing Erik!


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