Susanna Leonard Hill’s Halloweensie Contest Entry! “A Perfect Halloween Night”!

30 Oct

Hi folks! It’s that time of year again!

Time for Susanna Leonard Hill’s Halloweensie Contest!

Here’s the rules (From Ms. Hill’s site):

“The Contest:  write a 100 word Halloween story appropriate for children (title not included in the 100 words), using the words costumedark, and haunt.   Your story can be scary, funny or anything in between, poetry or prose, but it will only count for the contest if it includes those 3 words and is 100 words (you can go under, but not over!)  Get it?  Halloweensie – because it’s not very long and it’s for little people 🙂  (And yes, I know 100 words is short but that’s part of the fun and the challenge!  We got over 130 fantastic entries last year so I know you can do it!)  Also, you may use the words in any form – e.g. haunt, haunts, haunted, darkness, darkening, costumed, whathaveyou 🙂  No illustration notes please!”

Oh – and there’s prizes! 🙂

To check out all the rules, prizes and other great entries, click HERE to go to Ms. Hill’s blog.

So without further ado, here is my entry!


A Perfect Halloween Night (87 words)

By Erik Weibel

Dark and chilly.

Crisp and windy.

A perfect Halloween night.


Costume on.

Bag in hand.

Bring two more – just in case.


House by house.


And always say ‘Thank you’.


One house left.

No lights on.

A truly deserted place.


Ring the bell.

Shuffling heard.

Ghosts must haunt these grounds.


Door hinge creaks.

Holding breath.

Bony hand reaches out.


Skin tingles.

Feet drag.

Fear-struck on the door step.


Blood pulsing.

Stifled scream.

Happy Halloween, young man.


Kindly eyes.

Wrinkled smile…

New-found friend.

A perfect Halloween night.

36 Responses to “Susanna Leonard Hill’s Halloweensie Contest Entry! “A Perfect Halloween Night”!”

  1. julie rowan zoch October 30, 2015 at 5:15 pm #

    Love the pacing, Erik – this is great to read aloud!


  2. Darlene October 30, 2015 at 5:18 pm #

    I LOVE your entry. Good luck!!


  3. StephMWard October 30, 2015 at 5:56 pm #

    Oh how sweet…and spooky at the same time. I really like your story! Happy Halloween 🙂


  4. Catherine Johnson October 30, 2015 at 6:39 pm #

    Great twist and anticipation Erik. Well done!


  5. Penny Parker Klostermann October 30, 2015 at 8:40 pm #

    Way to build the tension, Erik! Very nice entry! Good luck!


  6. Robyn Campbell October 30, 2015 at 8:51 pm #

    I LOVE this. And I am so proud that my crit partner wrote such a jewel of a story. Erik, the ending touched me. What a twist. The elderly person. You are the best. xo


  7. cherylsec October 31, 2015 at 10:02 am #

    Love this, Erik! Great job! I especially like bringing the two extra bags for candy. Just in case. 🙂 Love the ending. Happy Halloweensie!


  8. lindaschueler October 31, 2015 at 11:31 am #

    Great twist. Love the words you use too.


  9. LovableLobo October 31, 2015 at 12:08 pm #

    Love that you included good manners in your perfect night, Erik. You are a class act. Happy Howl-o-ween!


  10. jeanjames October 31, 2015 at 1:51 pm #

    Really great entry!


  11. heylookawriterfellow October 31, 2015 at 3:21 pm #

    No cats. I approve.


  12. clarbojahn October 31, 2015 at 5:16 pm #

    Aawww! I love this!

    Happ y Halloween, Erik! 🙂


  13. Susanna Leonard Hill October 31, 2015 at 8:21 pm #

    Nicely paced, deliciously creepy, well done, Erik! Thanks so much for joining in the Halloweensie fun!


  14. Sue Morris @ KidLitReviews November 1, 2015 at 8:22 am #

    Very nice, it hops from word to word making it fun to read. Now you are a poet, too. 🙂


  15. Charlotte Dixon November 1, 2015 at 1:06 pm #

    A happy ending to a scary story 🙂 Love the twist. Good luck!


  16. yvettecarol November 1, 2015 at 4:09 pm #

    I had no idea you were a poet, Erik. Exquisite. I hope you win!


  17. Patricia Tilton November 1, 2015 at 4:19 pm #

    Very poetic. I enjoyed the build in tension. Great entry, Erik!


  18. Michelle Isenhoff November 4, 2015 at 8:45 am #

    Love your word choices. I can feel it. Great emotion and movement in there! (Saw you and Josie’s Halloween pic on FB. Fun costume, Fonz!)


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