My entry in the Susanna Leonard Hill 5th Annual Holiday Contest!

11 Dec

Yes, it’s that happy time of year when sugar plums are dancing, frost is nipping and we get to enter Susanna Leonard Hill’s Annual Holiday contest! WOO!

This year’s rules are as follows – (taken from Ms. Hill’s blog)

“Write a children’s story (children here defined as approximately age 12 and under) beginning with any version of “Rocking around the Christmas tree at the Christmas party hop.”  You may use that actual opening, or you may change it to any similar version “[Verb of your choice]ing [any preposition you choose] the [any item you choose] [any preposition you choose] the [venue of your choice].”    Your story may be poetry or prose, silly or serious or sweet, religious or not, based on Christmas, Hanukkah, Kwanzaa or whatever you celebrate, but is not to exceed 350 words . No illustration notes please.  Your entry should be posted on your blog between right now this very second and Friday December 11 at 11:59 PM EST.”
Here is my entry. It comes in at exactly 350 words.
Merry Christmas Mrs. Claus!
By Erik

“Rockin’ around the Christmas tree at the Christmas party hop? Who has time for that?” Mrs. Claus chirped.

She wiped her brow. It was Christmas Eve and she had a lot to do.

Gingerbread was baking, hooves needed trimming, Santa wanted his beard curled, the sleigh’s guidance system wasn’t working. This was just the beginning of her ‘to do’ list.

Mrs. Claus looked at her list and, with a twinkle in her eye, started to work.

She packed toys, checked the reindeer’s jingle bells and fixed a button on Santa’s coat. As she was breaking up an argument between two elves, Rudolph clopped in.
“Will you polish my nose?”

“Of course dear,” she smiled.

“I don’t get it Mrs. Claus. Why are there no Christmas songs about you?” Wilhelm Elf said thoughtfully.

“Christmas isn’t about songs. It’s about serving others. I’m happy to do my little part,” Mrs. Claus remarked.

“You organize the naughty and nice lists, wax the sleigh’s runners, hang the lights, paint the toys – YOU MAKE SURE THE BATTERIES ARE INCLUDED!” Wilhelm exclaimed.

There was a loud “Ho ho HELP!” and an even louder crash.

Mrs. Claus dashed over to find Santa laying on the ground with ornaments strewn around him.

“Ho ho ooh,” Santa grumbled. “My back.”

“What happened, Papa?” Mrs. Claus reached to help Santa.

“I was carrying these in for you when I slipped,” Santa moaned.

“You have to make your run!” Mrs. Claus gasped.

“I don’t think I will be going anywhere tonight,” Santa signed. “You should make the run.”

“I can’t do that!” Mrs. Claus quipped.

“If anyone has the spirit of Christmas, it is you,” Santa said as he gently took her hand. “You can do it.”

With a kiss she grabbed Santa’s coat and darted out the door. Santa and Wilhelm scurried to the window in time to see the sleigh take flight. Mrs. Claus was holding the reigns.

“Merry Christmas Mama,” Santa said with a wink.

“I think we fooled her,” Wilhelm giggled.

“Where’s my pen?” Santa boomed. “We need to write a song called ‘Here Comes Mrs. Claus’.”


48 Responses to “My entry in the Susanna Leonard Hill 5th Annual Holiday Contest!”

  1. Anonymous December 11, 2015 at 3:49 pm #

    Love this, Erik. The concept is a total charmer, and it is written craftily! No surprise, considering your talent. Good luck!


  2. The Story Reading Ape December 11, 2015 at 3:52 pm #

    Reblogged this on Chris The Story Reading Ape's Blog and commented:
    Great little story from Author, Blogger & Book Reviewer Extraordinaire Erik 👍😃

    Liked by 1 person

  3. Patrick Jones December 11, 2015 at 4:00 pm #

    Excellent story! And a twist at the end too 🙂 Merry Christmas and Happy New Year Erik!!


  4. Robyn Campbell December 11, 2015 at 4:23 pm #

    *snort* Love your story. You are quite the donutty writer. That ending has got to be the best twist I’ve read yet. Perfect. So a donut is in order here. You know that, right? Merry Christmas. You are the best!


  5. Genevieve Petrillo December 11, 2015 at 4:45 pm #

    She did it! Yay, Mrs. Claus! Go, girl!

    Love and licks,


  6. viviankirkfield December 11, 2015 at 4:51 pm #

    Erik…you are an awesome writer! Oh my goodness…what a great story…lots of fun, love the dialogue, and perfect pacing!


  7. Darlene December 11, 2015 at 5:06 pm #

    I love it!! You should win.


  8. jama December 11, 2015 at 5:23 pm #

    Wonderful and fun, Erik. Love Rudolph asking to have his nose polished. 🙂 Great ending!


  9. Debbie Austin December 11, 2015 at 7:07 pm #

    Great job, Erik! Love Willhelm as a name for an elf. This is very clever and fun! Good luck!


    • ThisKidReviewsBooks December 12, 2015 at 11:39 am #

      Thank you! My original (over-worded) draft featured Wilhelm with holey lederhosen. 😉


  10. Janet Smart December 11, 2015 at 7:36 pm #

    Good story. Mrs. Claus finally gets the credit she deserves.


  11. Cindy Williams Schrauben December 11, 2015 at 7:41 pm #

    Cute twist, very original. Nice job


  12. Sue Morris @ KidLitReviews December 11, 2015 at 7:44 pm #

    Nice Erik.Love the twist. And Rudolph’s un-shiny nose! 😆 I hope you win.


  13. JEN Garrett December 12, 2015 at 12:41 am #

    Lol, I bet she felt like she was on vacation. 🙂


  14. Catherine Johnson December 12, 2015 at 5:19 am #

    Wonderful, Erik! What a unique idea. Yay for Mrs. Claus and sneaky Santa.


  15. ptnozell December 12, 2015 at 12:00 pm #

    Love this entry, Erik! So perceptive that it takes more than the front man to get a job done.


  16. Gabi Snyder December 12, 2015 at 12:47 pm #

    Wonderful story, Erik! Why aren’t there more songs and stories written about Mrs. Claus?! This is a fun read through and through. I especially like that Mrs. Claus shines Rudolph’s nose. Ha!


  17. Alan Tucker December 12, 2015 at 1:02 pm #

    Love the idea and the execution, Erik! Mrs. Claus definitely needs some cred! Well done 🙂


  18. Lauri Meyers December 12, 2015 at 4:24 pm #

    Erik, I think you may be wise beyond your years when it comes to the magic of marriage! Smart move, Santa. Very nice story.


  19. Angela Brown December 12, 2015 at 4:44 pm #

    You’ve got yourself a lovely story here, Erik!


  20. Tracey M. Cox December 12, 2015 at 9:08 pm #

    Ahhhhhh, Santa is a sweetie! Merry Christmas, Mrs. Claus!


  21. Susanna Leonard Hill December 14, 2015 at 2:09 pm #

    What fun, Erik! Love that Santa and the elves schemed to give Mrs. Claus her moment! Especially because it seems like Christmas would never happen without her! 🙂 Happy Holidays, and thank so much for joining in the contest fun!


  22. heylookawriterfellow December 14, 2015 at 4:04 pm #

    Oh, I love this, Erik! That gal deserves songs. I mean, come ON, she even has to curl the fat man’s beard?

    You know what? Forget the songs, she deserves the salary of a CEO.


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